v.2. I like this piece a lot better. I feel like this version is much more final. The second stanza softens things a bit, but to me makes more sense of the entire scenario. I like the new stanzas in sections I and III and feel like they let the poem breathe a bit more. Less heavy monotony. I cleaned up some of the difficult phrases, cut some of the superfluous ones, and, of course, changed the title.