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The Invisible and Concrete
He walks away
burning mouth full of blood
staining the sidewalk with scarlet stars
every time he spits
He listens to the grass
invisible mouths wide in worship
adoration of the simple for the necessary
glassy songs infinite and empty
He stares up into heaven
every blind eye some desperate star
a tired sky full of bodies burning
waiting to expire
He walks away
burning mouth full of blood
staining the sidewalk with scarlet stars
every time he spits
He listens to the grass
invisible mouths wide in worship
adoration of the simple for the necessary
glassy songs infinite and empty
He stares up into heaven
every blind eye some desperate star
a tired sky full of bodies burning
waiting to expire
11.16.03
Changes made from the original. Tenses shifted in the first two
stanzas on the suggestion of ~ fauxgravity, line removed from
the third stanza as per ~terov's suggestion, and repetition of the
word sky removed from the third stanza as per my own dissatisfaction.
Original my still be seen on
strangejournal
here.
.
~digitalcrayons
Changes made from the original. Tenses shifted in the first two
stanzas on the suggestion of ~ fauxgravity, line removed from
the third stanza as per ~terov's suggestion, and repetition of the
word sky removed from the third stanza as per my own dissatisfaction.
Original my still be seen on
strangejournal
here.
.
~digitalcrayons
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Great story, far too common. Nothing about this poem is overly confusing...it all fits together well, and its like a movie made up of words.
I can see it all in my head.
Excellent job...
I can see it all in my head.
Excellent job...